Free Starlady & Fast-Friend by George R. R. Martin

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    She was naked, wreathed in fire, adrift among the stars[,] She no longer breathed — replaced comma with period
    “Her next,” he said[,] — replaced comma with period
    “The course has been altered,” he stated. He looked at her[,] — replaced comma with period
    “We’ll be right on top of them in five minutes,” Brand said. Robi pretended not to hear. // “I don’t know about you, Brand,” she said — added paragraph break
    Brand silenced her with a look[,] — replaced comma with period